TWITTER POEMS
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Show, don’t tell
They TELL us.
Concrete Nouns and
Vivid Verbs
They ABSTRACT.
THIS, They explain
is a Poem
and it must be done
My way.
#highschoolwritingteachers
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Library books smell
like coffee stains,
pulpy, aging paper
and humanity.
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I don’t dog-ear my books
– it ruins them.
I scribble multicolored notes
along their edges
between their lines
– it makes them mine.
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Libraries had
picture books
and me-sized chairs
and my daddy’s full attention.
Libraries have
novels
and solitude
and anonymity.
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HAIKU
Droplets disappear
in puddles. But puddles are
nothing without drops.
As someone who is obsessed with the smell of books, I especially like the tweet poem about library books! I also appreciate the theme of books and libraries throughout most of the poems. The message about high school teachers limiting creativity through poem rules is especially strong through the words in caps. Maybe "solitude" and "anonymity" are too abstract- consider switching them out for something more concrete that could also fit in the tweet poem?
ReplyDeleteAlso, the haiku was simple, yet so meaningful at the same time. Your poetic voice is strong as always.
I really liked your first twitter poem because I feel like this a lot in creative writing classes. It is very relatable. I also liked the poem about the Library and how our perspective changes as we grow from a small child to an adult. For the last three twitter poems I would suggest adding in a hashtag as a little punch line to sum up the whole poem. Nice!
ReplyDeleteYour first twitter poem is so true! I don't understand why some words are capitalized - is it because they are abstract words? I wish there were more hashtags to give the poems more edge. The speakers haiku was very simple and meaningful. Great job!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite poems here are your Twitter poems about books and libraries. I thought you did a good job writing images like scribbling doodles and me-sized chairs. I thought weakest poem was the last library one because you only gave s ‘novels’ ‘solitude’ and ‘anonymity’ without giving us more of an image so it felt like an abstraction.
ReplyDeleteThere are so many poems to choose from here. My favorite was the last one (the haiku about the droplets). Great image and hidden message. I took from it some sense of community: though you become part of something greater than you, and you are seen as "one of many," the community can't exist without you. I liked the hidden tension in that.
ReplyDeleteTo be honest, I didn't quite understand the first three poems, where you capitalized one word in each stanza. Also, it would be great to see these twitter poems posted on twitter and posted here!